I've read some of the art critiques you've posted in the past, and I always enjoyed how well thought and level they were—honest and constructive. I was hoping I could request a critique on the last piece I posted (in sepia, featuring Celestia and Luna) /tagged/arting. I'm not pleased with it and want to rework it. I know you probably have a lot going on with your own work and school, and good critique takes effort, so I understand if you don't have time for this sort of thing. Cheers!
Asked by marbleyarns
Awww… thank you. I’d love to. <3
First, tell me a little about it, so I can make the best critique I can. What’s the piece about—what’s the mood/feeling/narrative you’d like the piece to convey? What is it that you’re not pleased with (if you know)?
I have two siblings, and together the three of us are very close. We’ve done a lot together and all encouraged each other’s growth. Even though we all go our own ways now and then, coming back together again, discussing the past and present, is one of the most wonderful things. I imagined such a bond for Celestia and Luna.
I wanted the scene to be about the two, together as siblings, visiting a place which might not hold the best of memories—offset by chancing upon their collective journal, a symbol for the positive memories they share.
It didn’t print as well as I would have liked, which was one of the purposes of the piece. But I also felt that it didn’t convey the sense of place or atmosphere that I was hoping for. The set was to contrast the warm feeling of discovery between the sisters with something slightly foreboding, perhaps; evidence of a troubled past.
Hopefully that is enough to build off of! Already, I think that one of the problems might be that I did not consider these questions very thoroughly when I started the piece. x_x